Wednesday, November 28, 2012

Novel Infidelity

Back in October, I posted on this blog my commitment to using NaNoWriMo to finish my WIP. I'm here to report back on my progress.

I have, indeed, finished my novel. The book is 92,025 words. 

I typed "the end," and sat back to wait for the fireworks. None came. I waited for some pride to sneak in and fluff up my ego. It didn't. I waited for that sense of completion to come and overwhelm me. Again, I waited in vain. 

I don't feel proud, (well, maybe a little). Let me amend that. I don't feel proud that I have a completed first draft, because that's all it is. It's a first draft, in dire need of revisions. The night before I finished it, Sunday night, I tossed and turned in my bed thinking of all the things I needed to go fix. It wasn't technically done yet, I still had to write the chapter that tied up all the loose ends. But the nagging itch, that is what I feel more than anything. The nagging urge to fix, correct, and mold what I have now into something sparkly. I feel the call to revise. 

But what to do? I've read on other blogs and books of advice to writers that suggest I need to walk away from the novel for a while. I need to go do something else so when I do come back to it, my eyes won't be clouded by what I think it should be and lose the focus on what it is. It's good advice, advice I've passed on to others, as a matter of fact. But for me it's really hard to follow. 

It took so long for me to commit to finishing the dang thing. Now that the story's been vomited onto the page, I feel like if I don't clean it up now I'll never get back to it. So I'm in a quandary. Do I trust the advice of people far wiser than I, or do I trust what I know about myself? 

And to add more problems to my situation, I have two or three more books I want to write. The ideas for them have been bubbling around in my mental percolator for weeks, and I want to play with them. Is it cheating to write another book while I'm still committed to my first one? Novel infidelity, I'm shocked at myself. 

Wednesday, November 14, 2012

NaNoWriMo Update

I was very proud for the first four days of NaNo. I was beating the 1667 a day word count, and the little  data page told me I would finish my 50,000 words early.

And then Sunday happened.

Sunday afternoon I start feeling a little...wrong.

By Sunday evening, I was certain a HazMat team would enter my home to take me away. No one should have approached me without full biohazard gear on. I had the Stomach Virus To End All Stomach Viruses. Yes, it should be capitalized.

I lay in bed like a dead thing for three days.

So, now I'm struggling to get enough words written each day to win NaNo. My dreams of hitting 50K before Thanksgiving are crushed, all thanks to whatever little urchin passed the bug to my son at school.

Ugh.

Thursday, November 1, 2012

How I Spent Halloween: The Goatman

Halloween to my kids means candy and costumes, but this year it meant NaNoWriMo prep for me. So this is how I spent my Halloween. It was supposed to be a flash fiction story, but apparently I don't have a gift for getting a story out in 1,000 words or less. I'm not that pleased with it, but for only working on it for a day it's passable.

Without further ado:

The Goatman

by Bethany Valles



Some cities celebrate their founding, others the harvest of their local crop. But no one knows when Goat, Texas, a tiny ranching community in the Valley, began, and the only thing that grows well here is cactus. So we celebrate Goat Day. It’s not usually a big deal. There’s a Tilt-a-Whirl, a Ferris wheel, deep-fried candy bars, and carnival games. I was tired of it by the time I was six, but my parents kept dragging me through the gaudy display every year anyway.

The day before the festival my parents sat me down. They’d already been pushy at dinner, saying I needed another helping, that I was too skinny. It was annoying. So when they each sat down beside me on the couch and turned off the TV, I knew nothing good could come of it.

“Casey, you know Goat Day is tomorrow,” Mom said.

“Yeah, so? What’s up, Mom?”

 “Let’s just tell her,” Mom said over my head, looking directly at Dad with one of those stares that meant something to him, but not me.

“Honey, you’ve been chosen to be the Cheva!” Mom said after a pause. Her tone was excited on the surface, but her eyes didn’t match her voice. They were cold.

“Oh, great. Cheva, that’s cool,” I said, trying not to sound too bored. The Cheva was sort of like the Goat Day queen. She led the parade in a white dress, and then went to sit on her throne. She has ropes tied to her hands, and then she waits for this guy dressed like a goat to come take her down, sort of a goat-hero rescuing the damsel-in-distress. It was the lamest tradition I could imagine. But it’s the best a town called Goat could come up with.

Maggie Cervantes was the Cheva last year, and she acted like she’d been elected homecoming queen. I guess I should be excited, but I wasn’t.

 The day of the opening parade dawned way too early. Mom woke me up at six and told me to get cleaned up.

Then the primping began. Mom and the town beautician, Leticia, were plucking, buffing, waxing, and polishing anything that was exposed.

Before I knew it, the dress was on and it was time for the parade. I stood in front of the whole thing. The war veterans marched behind me, and everyone in town who owned an instrument was behind them. The football team came next, and then lastly, the cheerleaders.

I waited for the cue from the guy directing the band before I started walking. When he waved at me, I walked around the corner of the bank where we’d been waiting, expecting applause.

None came.

It felt like I was part of a funeral procession. The crowd was solemn. It was weird. I’d planned on smiling and waving a lot, but suddenly it seemed a much better idea to get to the end of the route fast.

I did my best not to run, but when I heard my mother’s wail from the crowd I couldn’t help it. I ran, and not for the end of the route, I ran for the first door I saw. I sprinted toward Flor’s, a Mexican diner I knew well. But suddenly there was a wall of people in my way. I slowed, looking for a way around them, but before I could dodge them there were hands on me, turning me around and shoving me roughly back into the street, to the humiliating parade.

I tried again and again to escape, each time I was pushed back into the procession. Finally, I just stopped. I stood still, and waited for the veterans to go around me.

Instead, fingers wrapped tightly around my arms and began to propel me forward. I looked around me to see an old man on each side. Each one had a pistol, but the one on my right actually took his out and held it to my ribs, pushing the barrel against me to move me forward.

“Please,” I begged. I don’t know when I started crying, but I noticed now that my voice was wavering.

“You got to,” was all he said.

I looked into the crowd, trying in vain to find an outraged face, someone who would help.

And then we turned the corner, onto Main Street, where the throne stood. I didn’t know why, but I suddenly understood that under no circumstances would I go up those steps and sit on that chair.

I fought. I kicked the men holding me. I pulled with all my strength against their grasping fingers. I screamed.

“Please, someone, help me!” I yelled at the onlookers. But all the eyes I met looked away.

I thought of my parents’ faces as they explained my role this year, and a new horror overtook my frantic mind. They knew. They knew, as I knew now, that something bad was coming.

All the fight went out of me then. I sagged in the hands of men I didn’t know, and they dragged my limp body up the steps, turned me, and sat me on the throne.

The hands didn’t release me as someone new, the mayor, I realized, began tying me to the throne. I wasn’t the least bit surprised when the ropes were pulled so tight they bit into my skin. I remembered, idly, that the ropes were so loose for Maggie Cervantes they’d actually fallen off early.

I looked up from my lap to stare at the crowd. Last year the crowd pressed up against the steps to the throne. Now they were still flanking the street, like the parade wasn’t over yet. The local sheriff’s department had joined the veterans and they were all standing in front of the people, like they were trying to protect them. They were all armed. They were all silent.

I could hear the wind whistling through the streets, blowing plastic bags and fliers advertising the sales at the local grocery store around in circles.

The weight of the stares aimed in my direction felt like it was pinning me to the chair, a separate restraint from the ropes.

I heard someone gasp. I looked toward whoever it was but before I could locate them, I heard something else.

I heard a snuffling sound. It sounded like an animal following a scent. I remembered last year, when the captain of the football team had played the goat hero. A guy dressed like a goat, playing a role…

Oh no…

My imagination didn’t have time to run amok, because the monster was coming up the street now, following my scent.

It had thick, dark hair, or it could have been the thing’s skin. It was easily eight feet tall, even hunched as it was. It’s legs bent backward when it walked, like an animal taught to walk upright. I heard a clicking when it stepped forward in its jerky, crouched gait. It was narrow; it’s shoulders as wide as it’s hips. As it came closer, I could tell that its skin was not as dark as its hair. It grew like fur on its legs and mid-section and thinned over its chest. Its arms bent in a more humanoid way at the elbows and for one second I felt reassured by that.

And then I saw the thing’s hands.

Two very long, very narrow fingers protruded not from a wrist, but from the elbow. The digits didn’t seem to bend, for when the creature bent to crouch and sniff the places I’d been it leaned on them like crutches.

The beast’s head was shaped like a goat, with a longer muzzle and protruding ears. But its eyes… the eyes were slit like a goat’s. And red.

I screamed. I couldn’t help it. I thrashed against the ropes until blood flowed from my chafed skin. It was a mistake.

Its eyes focused on me. The goat-man shuddered in a long rippling motion along its back. It crouched, and leaped, farther than should be possible, and landed on the stairs to the dais where I was trapped.

It stood at the foot of the steps and watched me as I watched it. I heard a high-pitched noise, like a tea kettle whistling. It was coming from me.

The goat-man’s features were too animalistic to be attached to a mostly humanoid body. My mind couldn’t make sense of what I was seeing. I tried to see the costume, the individual pieces that made up the whole.

But there was no seam to find. This was real. I felt cold all over as I realized the whole town play-acts this scene every year.

It smiled at me, as these horrifying pieces began to fit together in my head. It was intelligent enough to understand I was terrified, and it enjoyed that.

The teeth inside the muzzle didn’t belong. They were far, far too numerous and tiny, like hundreds of needles lining its mouth.

Hide. Make myself small. Don’t look, it’s not real it can’t be real. Mommy help me. Wake me up Mommy I’m asleep. Hide hide hide…



“Well, that’s over,” Sheriff Riggs said to Oscar. Oscar nodded slowly. “Wish she wasn’t a screamer. I hate it when they scream,” was Oscar’s only reply.

They both watched as the fire chief opened up the hydrant and washed what was left of Casey down the storm drains of Main Street.